Wednesday, October 27, 2010

Blog Crit of IN THE DUKE'S BED

Here's my blog critique of IN THE DUKE'S BED sample. Thanks to the anonymous volunteer. Feel free to add to my crit, agree with it or disagree. Reading is subjective, and to a certain degree, so is editing.

Below is my detailed critique. Please select FULL SCREEN to view, then once the document is open RIGHT CLICK to ZOOM and view the comments.

Blog Crit of in the Duke's Bed by Anon
The text and critique are only posted on this blog and not on a true public forum. Next Wednesday, I'll critique again.

If you're interested in a critique, send your first 500 words to me at lynnette_labelle at hotmail dot com. Please put "Blog Critique" in the subject, so I know it's not spam. Let me know the genre of the sample and whether or not I have permission to use your name. There are a few people still waiting for crits, so your piece will be added to the queue. I'll let you know roughly how long it'll be once I receive your sample.

Please note: I'm only accepting one sample per person at this time.

Thanks to all who've volunteered to share their work on my blog.


  1. I love the concept of this and especially how you left it open for thought! The first line was addicting. :)

  2. The anonymous writer who volunteered to have this piece critiqued contacted me via email and said this: "Lynnette, thanks so much for the critique. The thing that amazed me the most is that I pride myself in being a natural born proofreader--but this was an early draft and I could not believe the REPETITIONS I missed (i.e., the same words used over again in a short space of writing). You also pointed out stylistic concerns as well that are really valid. Your comments were really helpful--thanks again!"

    P.S. She gave me permission to post her comments.

    Lynnette Labelle