Wednesday, November 17, 2010

Blog Critique of THE ELDER by Angela McCallister

Here's my blog critique of THE ELDER by Angela McCallister. Thanks to Angela for volunteering. Feel free to add to my crit, agree with it or disagree. Reading is subjective, and to a certain degree, so is editing.

Below is my detailed critique. Please select FULL SCREEN to view, then once the document is open RIGHT CLICK to ZOOM and view the comments.

Blog Crit of the Elder by Angela McCallister

The text and critique are only posted on this blog and not on a true public forum. Next Wednesday, I'll critique again.

If you're interested in a critique, send your first 500 words to me at lynnette_labelle at hotmail dot com. Please put "Blog Critique" in the subject, so I know it's not spam. Let me know the genre of the sample and whether or not I have permission to use your name. There are a few people still waiting for crits, so your piece will be added to the queue. I'll let you know roughly how long it'll be once I receive your sample.

Please note: I'm only accepting one sample per person at this time.

Thanks to all who've volunteered to share their work on my blog.
Lynnette Labelle


  1. I agree with Lynette. I'm a sucker for a good fantasy, but just a little more information would be good.

  2. Fantastic feedback, Lynette! I appreciate your time with this. I did actually fix a good chunk of these problems after entering Miss Snark's Secret Agent contest in October. I think I sent you a revision, but it's amazing you caught all of the problems the commenters caught (and they only had the first 250 words) and then some. It's much better to have more eyes on the MS.

    I highly recommend anyone looking to sharpen their writing submit here :)

  3. Angela, I'm sorry. I meant to critique your good copy. If you still want a crit, please send it to me AGAIN. When I have a chance, I'll critique it and email it to you.

    Lynnette Labelle