Recently, I posted Jeanne Fritz's critiqued query letter. She has since revised it and I've critiqued it again.
Below is my detailed critique. Please select FULL SCREEN to view, then once the document is open RIGHT CLICK to ZOOM and view the comments.
Jeanne Fritz - Query Crit 2 - A Safe Place in Hell
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